This is the first draft I have written of my script, with a few small changes from Michelina. Having taken the time for us all to review it, I feel it has gone the wrong way in that it focuses on Alice in too much of a negative light, making her look like something of a spoilt brat, having a similar effect on the Mother character. I think this is because it's so hard to write an argument and make it look as natural as possible, the subject it is about I think is fine, it's just how it is expressed which needs a lot of work.
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